建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组
1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关或重要的信息,完全可以删掉。例如:Whenallthingsareconsidered,youngadultsoftodaylivemoresatisfyinglivesthanthoseoftheirparents,inmyopinion.这句话当中的“whenallthingsareconsidered”和“inmyopinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:Youngadultsoftodaylivemoresatisfyinglivesthantheirparents.
2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换。例如:Duetothefactthatourgrandparentswereunderanobligationtohelptheirparents,theydidnothavetheoptionsthatyoungpeoplehaveatthispointintime.“duetothefactthat”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:Becauseourgrandparentswereobligatedtohelptheirparents,theydidnothavetheoptionsthatyoungpeoplehave
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建议二:避免重复
1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如:Thefarmmygrandfathergrewuponwaslargeinsize.large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以insize可以去掉,改为:Thefarmmygrandfathergrewuponwaslarge.更简洁的表达方式为:Mygrandfathergrewuponalargefarm.
2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换。例如:Mygrandfatherhassaidoverandoveragainthathehadtoworkonhisparents'farm.这里的overandoveragain就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:Mygrandfatherhassaidrepeatedlythathehadtoworkonhisparents'farm.
建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构。选择合适的语法结构可以使句子的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。
1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中最重要的意思。例如:Thesituationthatresultedinmygrandfather'snotbeingabletostudyengineeringwasthathisfatherneededhelponthefarm.从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather'snotbeingabletostudy”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:Mygrandfathercouldn'tstudyengineeringbecausehisfatherneededhelponthefarm.
2.避免频繁使用“therebe”结构。例如:Therewere25cowsonthefarmthatmygrandfatherhadtomilkeveryday.Itwashardworkformygrandfather.可以改为:Mygrandfatherworkedhard.Hehadtomilk25cowsonthefarmeveryday.更简洁的句式为:Mygrandfatherworkedhardmilking25cowsdaily.
3.把从句改为短语或单词。例如:Dairycowswereraisedonthefarm,whichwaslocated100kilometersfromthenearestuniversityandwasinanareathatwasremote.
更简介的表达:Thedairyfarmwaslocatedinaremotearea,100kilometerstothenearestuniversity.
4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。例如:Inthefall,notonlydidthecowshavetobemilked,butalsothehaywasmowedandstackedbymygrandfather'sfamily.这句话的重心应该是“忙碌的家mygrandfather'sfamily”,而使用了被动语态后,重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:Inthefall,mygrandfather'sfamilynotonlymilkedthecowbutalsomowedandstackedthehay.
5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语。例如:Mygrandfatherdidn'thavetimetostandarounddoingnothingwithhisschoolfriends.Standarounddoingnothing完全可以用一个动词表达,即loiter:Mygrandfatherdidn'thavetimetoloiterwithhisschoolfriends.
6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达。例如:Profitsfromthefarmwerenotlarge.Sometimestheyweretoosmalltomeettheexpensesofrunningafarm.Theywerenotsufficienttopayforauniversitydegree.两句话的信息可以合并为一句:Profitsfromthefarmweresometimestoosmalltomeetoperationalexpenses,letalonepayforauniversitydegree.
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