新托福写作如何将短句变长句
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新托福写作如何正确的将短句变长句,让考生们头痛的问题,错落的长短句应用构成一篇生动的文章,而好的句型让整篇文章充满色彩,让考官读起来更有兴趣。
曾经有很多同学相当困惑,究竟什么样口味的句子才是ETS阅卷官们喜欢的?五香麻辣锅还是香草冰激凌?谜底曰:在新托福写作中,终极口味为“具体具体再具体”,Youcannotbemorespecific.这也意味着,句子越细节,你的得分越高,但绝不是生搬硬套、东拉西扯。所以,本次魔法的核心技能就是扩充句子,使其获得由短变长的飞跃。究竟怎样扩充句子呢?有如下方式:
1、增加并列成分
2、增加修饰成分
3、增加从句
4、增加连词
来个句子具体化练习:
Theygrowlonghair.
这个句子没有任何闪光点,我们利用以上魔法来修改这句话,变成了如下的句子:
Theygrowlonghair,regardlessofthegender,usuallypartofwhichisdyedingold.这句话就相当璀璨夺目,有修饰成分也有从句(魔法效果果然不是盖的)。
同理,做以下的三个练习:
Theywearjeans.
Theywearjeansineachandeveryseason,monlykneesofwhicharedeliberatetorn.
Boyswearearrings.
Boysarekeenonearringsandotherweirdornaments.
Girlssmoke.
GirlsarefondofMarlborosorsomeoddbadwords.
以下为一组多个句子组成的一段话:
Energyismuchneedednow.Andnuclearplantsarecleanandeconomical.Theycanproducevastamountsofenergy.Butpeople,especiallylocalresidentsareveryconcernedaboutsafety.Theyholdastrongnegativeattitudetowardthem.
这几个句子都是简单句,虽然表达的意思很清楚,但是明显没有满足ETS的口味偏好。下面我们将上述句子搭配成完整的复杂句。合并句子的准则为:同一个词汇可以合并,变成从句或修饰成分,例如“energy”、“people”。修改后的句子为:
Nuclearplantsareacleanandeconomicalwayofproducingvastamountsofmuch-neededenergy;howeverpeople,especiallylocalresidents,whoareveryconcernedaboutsafety,holdastrongnegativeattitudetowardthem.
同理,做两个练习:
修改前:Somepeoplesucceed.Otherpeoplefail.Thedifferenceisnotthenumberofopportunities.Itiswhethertheycantakeadvantageofopportunities.Opportunitieswillariseinthecourseofone’slife,thoughtheyarerare.
修改后:Oneessentialdifferencebetweenthosewhosucceedandthosewhofailistheextenttowhichtheytakeadvantageofopportunitiesratherthanthenumberofopportunities,whichwillinevitablyarise,ifrarely,inthecourseofone’slife.
修改前:Collegestudentsnowareprimarilyinterestedingradesandeconomicsuccess.Theyareexpectedtocheatmorefrequently.Theyareunlikethosegraduatestenyearsago.Theyareonlyinterestedintheirownpersonalfutureandconsiderlittletheproblemofsociety.
修改后:Collegestudents,primarilyinterestedingradesandeconomicsuccess,areexpectedtocheatmorefrequentlythanthosewhograduatedtenyearsagoandarefarlessconcernedwiththeproblemofsocietythanwiththeirownpersonalfuture.
至此大家应该知道短变长魔法大体如何使用。同学们请时刻牢记:不积跬步,无以成千里;不积小流,无以成江河。踏实练习造句能力,提高语言书面感和地道感,早日拿下托福写作。